Haiku

I recently saw Memoirs Of A Geisha at the cinema. I was a little disappointed. The book is much better. However, at the end, Sayuri (Chiyo) says, and I paraphrase: "The heart dies a long, slow and painful death. Like a tree shedding its leaves, leaf after leaf, the heart sheds its hopes, hope after hope, until there is nothing left."

I thought this was a beautifully sad sentiment and wondered how to turn it into a haiku. I came up with this:

Hearts die a slow death
Hopes shed, as a tree sheds leaves:
Baron; all is ice

Then I got on a roll and made up some others. Some of them are rubbish, but I've left them in anyway.

I know loneliness
As does the last autumn leaf;
Lonely, together

I see loneliness
In the last leaf on my tree;
We are not alone

Walking on thin ice
Heavy burdens weigh me down;
Ice cracks and I die

You left me alone
My world has come to an end -
But summer still comes

Oversensitive;
I feel cactus spikes, bee stings
Alas, not your love

Standing in the dark
I can't even see myself;
But I see your void

Icy winter nights
Are tempered by your presence;
This summer was cold

Summer follows spring
And just as absolutely...
I will follow you

Autumn crane flies die
When children pull off their wings
You took my wings; death

Now that you have gone
I only talk with myself;
I say: I hate you

You said you loved me -
Just like the Venus-Fly-Trap
Welcomes a wee fly

The long winter nights
Mean I have longer to dream;
More time for nightmares

Keep your icy heart;
But take me, I beg of you
Lock, stock and barrel

I'm always dreaming
Of how I can get you back;
A valentine card?

It was Christmas day
You were gone and I was sad;
Next year I want you